Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts
Showing posts with label writing. Show all posts

Thursday, 24 June 2021

Writing Sample Madness!

 Wow! Last week was such a busy week with Ultimate Frisbee, Writing Samples, and much more. We were tested on the 16th of June (Last week). It was really challenging to write it. But yesterday we put it into Write That Essay and I got my feedback to 98%. It was stuck on 98% and really frustrating to get it higher. Next time I could use more sentences types and try to use less exclamation marks. I also started repeating sentences in the introduction. Anyways, with all that said, look at my writing by clicking this link. Below is some screenshots of before and after. 

Before:

After:

Friday, 23 August 2019

Cross country

Cross country

   
Today were going to Cross country. It's my first time doing cross country. When I arrived at school it was somewhere around 8:40-8:45. The bell rang and we did attendance and Koka Rozie was talking about cross country then, we went to the court I got a buddy and started walking to cross country.

We finally arrived at Cross country and we sat in our year groups. "Hello parents, grandparents, aunts and supporters, please go to your child if you want to speak to them because we want to make sure they stay in bounds." (That's not actually what she said but she said something like that)   Koka Sophia explained.  After that I started scouting out the area for my dad.  Then I saw him and waved to him and he waved back. Then Koka Sophie explained "The year sixes are going first but, they'll also have the longest race."

Then the year six girls began to quickly walk to the starting line and Matua Nic shouted "On your marks, get set!" and banged two chalkboard erasers together and made a "BANG" sound.  At that moment the year six girls started running and sprinted like there was an lion chasing them.  A few minutes later they called the year six boys and Matua Nic once again said "On your marks, get set!" and banged the chalkboard erasers together again. Then some year six girls passed the line and then some minutes later the boys started crossing the line and the girls finished their turn.

Then some minutes later they called the year 5 girls AND boys. The girls got a head start and after some seconds the boys could go and I sprinted.  I saw my dad but ignored him and continued sprinting for 1st place. We turned and went up a sandy place and I started to hear people cheer and scream.  A few minutes later I was at the finishing line but I still had a lap to go, but this time I sprinted faster and I was already half way through the lap. As I went up the sandy area again I saw my dad standing there taking photos. When I reached the top Kobe was so close to me.  I started sprinting towards the drop and went down extremely fast and then I saw the BIG drop where we turn around. I started to go down and I saw Kobe trip because of Milo. I sprinted and went in front of them. While I was running up started thinking, "YES I'M GONNA BEAT KOBE AND MILO!" As I thought I realized they were gaining on me and I started sprinting faster. I saw the finishing line and I SHOT through there like a bullet. When I turned around I saw Kobe and Milo sprinting for the finish line and they crossed it very tired. 

I started feeling sick as I was walking to my dad. We said goodbye and I sat in my year group.

THE END.

BY Anroux 😁